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During assembly period, there was a cello performance by professional cello player. He started with his acustic cello. I almost fell asleep because the sound of acustic cello was familiar to me since I was in an orchestra. I thought he was just a normal chello player who came to perform other composers' musics. Nevertheless, after he showed up his electric cello, I was completely awake. The sound of the electric cello was amazing. He made electric guitar sounds with the electric cello. He made some melodies that may be included in a movie. It was very impressive.

Essay 13

Falling In Love:

My Thoughts About Love

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

04/26/11

(TS) Unquestionably, true love begins when a couple falls into love even though there are numerous people who build fake love, which is not from their heart but their mind. (SD) I strongly believe I will fall in love with a girl that I have never met, and if she has a good personality and she is candid, it would be more beneficial. (CM) Furthermore, I have fallen in love with a girl that I have never seen before; every time I saw her, my heart pounded like a drum. (CM) In addition, this true feeling of love begins when you fall into love, but not when you build love. (SD) Not only is building love impossible, it is also not true love, love that only occurs in your heart. (CM) In my opinion, love cannot be controlled by your mind, but may be controlled by your heart. (CM) If you build love, you cannot feel the same feeling of true love, the sense of palpitating and delight. (CS) Hence, I will fall into love because it is the only way that you can taste and share love as it is.

(TS) Even though love at first sight is very rare, I have experienced it at Rectory, the school that I have attended before I came to Pine Point School. (SD) On the first day at Rectory, I saw her in the dining room, sitting at same table. (CM) I could not eat my dinner because I was too distracted and attracted to her beauty. (CM) However, it was not just for me; she was looking at me the whole time, but we could not look at each other’s eyes at same time because we were too shy. (SD) Since it was Sunday night, I asked her, with my bravery, to watch a movie together. (CM) We did not watch the movie, but we were looking at each other’s eyes and smiling with love and bliss. (CM) Spontaneously, I asked her out in the movie theater, and kissed on her forehead; the answer was “yes”. (CS) Thus, this true love has begun with love at first sight, which I strongly believe is the inception of true love.

Outline for Essay 13

(TS) Fall in love

(SD) I probably will fall into love.

           (CM) My experience of falling in love.

           (CM) Most true loves happen when you fall into love

(SD) Building love is not true love.

           (CM) Love cannot be controlled by your mind, it is controlled by your heart.

           (CM) If you build love, then you don’t have the true feeling of love; this is why many built loves do not work well.

(CS) I will and hope to fall into love because it is the only way you may taste the true love.

Sonnet of Friendship

A friend is whom I may be sincere
A friend is who I may rely on
Even though our thoughts don't always cohere
Our friendship lighten this world like the sun
When we are together, we are delightful
And this joy will never be forgotten
Like a flower, our friendship will grow beautiful
My friendship with you will never be rotten

Essay 12

Metaphor Essay:

An Essay on My Friendship

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

April 17, 2011

           Ralph Waldo Emerson said, “A friend is whom I may be sincere.” There are many friends that I care of, but the one who I can trust and lean on is my mom. We were as close as a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo, but as I was sent to the United States, we are disassociated like the disunited magnets that are blocked by a wall. Without this friend, my mom, there are too many difficulties that I must confront.

My camaraderie with my mom is like the relationship between a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo. Firstly, my mom and I were very close that we knew almost everything about each other when I lived in Korea. I talked to her about my secrets, the information that I do not usually bring out in a conversation with my friends or my sisters, because I believed her and followed her more than anybody in the world. Moreover, even though my mom did not talk to me about some of her difficulties, I always got aware of what was happening. In addition, my mom and I were as intimate as a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo. As the mother kangaroo keeps her baby close in her pouch, my mom and I were friendly. Plus, as the mother kangaroo release her baby, my mom released me from her and sent me to the United States of America for a better education. However, after I came to the United States, my companionship with mom became like the detached magnets that are blocked by a thin wall, trying to be united, but unable to be connected. For example, like the magnets are disassociated and cannot be attached, my mom and I are disunited and cannot meet face-to-face. Furthermore, like the magnets attract and feel each other’s power through the thin wall, my mom and I talk through the phone and share information about each other such as my grades. Even though my friendship with my mom is still close like a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo, we are too far from each other to be the connected magnets.

To conclude, my mom is the most significant friend that I always trust, follow, and love. Even though we are the two disunited magnets, she is my mother kangaroo, and I am her baby kangaroo. I regret that I was peevish to my mom when I was in Korea. She is my friend whom I may be sincere.

Self-Assessment:

1. I am continuing to work on organization of the words, and writing comprehendible sentences.

2. One strong point I see is that CMs support SDs. They explain why the metaphors are apt.

3. A possible weak point of this essay is the conclusion, I had a hard time writing a conclusion. I am not sure what I have to write for each sentence.

4. I would give myself an A-, I depicted my friendship with my mom clearly

Essay 12: Outline

Bell word: detached

Echo words: disassociated, divided, disunited, segregated, separated, disjoined

(TS) My friendship with mom is like the relationship between a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo.

(SD) Firstly, my mom and I were very close that we knew almost everything about each other when I lived in Korea.

(CM) I talked to her about my secrets, the information that I do not usually bring out in a conversation with my friends or my sisters, because I believed her and followed her more than anybody in the world.

(CM) Moreover, even though my mom did not talked to me about some of her difficulties, I always got aware of what was happening.

(SD) In addition, my mom and I were as intimate as a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo.

           (CM)As the mother kangaroo keeps her baby close in her pouch, my mom and I were friendly.

           (CM) Plus, as the mother kangaroo release her baby, my mom released me from her and sent me to the United States of America for a better education.

(SD)However, after I came to the United States, my friendship with mom became like the detached magnets that are blocked by a thin wall, trying to be united, but unable to be connected.

           (CM) For example, like the magnets are disassociated and cannot be attached, mom and I are disunited and cannot meet face-to-face.

           (CM) Furthermore, like the magnets attract and feel each other’s power through the thin wall, mom and I talk through the phone and share information about each other such as my grades.

(CS) Even though my friendship with my mom is still close like a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo, we are too far from each other to be the connected magnets.

Essay 11

Essay 11:

Problems For Teenagers

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

April 06, 2011

           Recently, problems for teenagers are regarded as significant issues on all of the world’s seven continents. One of the major predicaments of adolescents, who study in a foreign country, is “major depressive disorder” - the extreme depression that occurs when someone feels deserted. According to a research, approximately forty percent of the United States’ international students - the students came from Korea, are in this disorder. This is hazardous because some of them may decide to suicide due to the feeling of being deserted. For example, the president of Samsung’s daughter - one of the wealthiest international students, was in major depressive disorder; she did not have a friend in the United States nor in Korea, and suicide because she felt abandoned from Korean and American society. Increasing drug uses and smoking of teenagers are malicious dilemmas. Even though drug uses and smoking are prohibited to teenagers in every country, there are numerous youngsters who break these laws. For instance, one of my friends at different school uses the drugs - the illegal drugs that make a person hyper, and got a disease that may malfunction his tongue. In addition, Korean parents and teachers’ punishment to their teenagers is considered as an obstacle for the Korean teenagers. In Korea, it is legal to give a teenager a physical punishment - spanking a youngster’s hands or butt with a stick such as a stick of wood. Most of the young children, who were physically disciplined, often tend to be hostile, defiant, and aggressive socially. Thus, major depressive disorder, drug uses and smoking, and physical punishment are the three major quandaries that are regarded as the important problems for teenagers. / Thus, the problems for teenagers are debatable issues that may astound a society.

           Not only do other teenagers have problems, but I also have obstacles in my life. Recently, I am not doing well in academics - the subjects such as English, History, and Science. I need to receive better grades in those subjects to register for high schools that I want to attend. However, even though I try my best to do better in the subjects, I do not get satisfying grades that I expect to get. When I was at Rectory School - the school that I attended before I transferred to Pine Point School, I always received grades of an “A” and “B” in every subject; on the other hand, it is arduous to get such grades at Pine Point. In addition, one of the reasons that cause this dilemma is because I go to bed late. If someone is born in Korea, the one must be trained to go to bed late because numerous Korean students study until the midnight comes. They stay up to study until they feel extremely tired from studying; and I was also trained by Korean students’ traditional and cultural habit. However, this malicious habit does not allow me to go to be before eleven o’ clock, and this affects being awake during the classes at school. Therefore, I confront these obstacles like other teenagers face their predicaments.

Essay 11 Outline

(TS) Many problems of teenagers these days.

(Bell word) Predicament, dilemma, obstacle

           (SD) International students

(CM) Many international students have major depressive disorder.

(CM) Example of Samsung.

           (SD) Teenagers’ drug uses and smoking

                     (CM) According to the internet site that I researched…

                     (CM) Ex: My friends

           (SD) Korean parents and teachers’ discipline to Korean teenagers.

(CM) In Korea, physical discipline- disciplining teenagers by physical punishment is one of the major problems.

(CM) Ex: Most of the young children, who were physically disciplined, often tend to be hostile, defiant, and aggressive socially.

(CS) Three major problems of teenagers must be aided.

(TS) I also have some problems

           (SD) I am not doing well in academics

                     (CM) I don’t get good grades from many classes that I expected to get

                     (CM) important for registering the high schools that I want to attend.

           (SD)  I go to bed very late.

                     (CM) trained to go to bed late.

                    (CM) cannot sleep before 11 p.m. and I’m not awake during the classes at school.

           (CS) I face these problems.