First Body Paragraph of Essay 6

Surprise:

Jem and Scout's Surprise About Atticus's Talent

A Paragraph by Inpyo Hong

8th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 25, 2010

(TS)  In To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM,) Jem and Scout were astonished about Atticus's secret talent, shooting. (SD1) Tim Johnson, "somethin' wrong with an old dog down yonder", was wandering down the main street toward Finch's house. (CM)Calpurnia called Heck Tate, a cop; she mentioned that Tim (the mad dog) was near where Scout, Jem, and Calpurnia were. (CM)Mr. Tate gave a rifle to Atticus, who said, "I haven't shot a gun in thirty years", and he shot Tim with only one shot in spite of his distance from the dog. (SD2) Jem said, "I saw that, One-Shot Finch!", and he was amazed after Atticus shot Tim because Jem thought Atticus was a boring father. (CM) Miss Maudie confided to Jem and Scout about Atticus's secret, which was that he was the best shooter in the county when he was young. (CM) When Scout wanted to praise Atticus's secret, Jem told her to keep the secret about Atticus's expertise with a rifle. (CS)From this amazing experience with Atticus, Jem and Scout were astonished at Atticus's talent, and also recognized that Atticus was not a tiresome father.

Revised Essay 5

Tears:

Reasons Why Jem Was Crying, and Feelings and Memories of Tears

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 22, 2010

           Occasionally, tears are very mysterious that even a detective cannot detect the reason of crying. Tears include many reasons and facts that we cannot observe and understand. When I was young, I cried a lot. Crying is sometimes very mysterious, and it can also give you a bad memories and feelings about tears.

           (TS)On page 84 in TKAM, Mr. Nathan put cement in the knothole in the tree and Jem had been crying while he was standing and looking at the tree, and it is very mysterious because the author did not state why Jem was crying. (SD)In my opinion, Jem had been crying because he would not be able to get presents such as a watch, from the knothole. (CM)Jem and Scout found many precious presents from the knothole. (CM)To quote Jem, “Atticus, if it’s all right with you, I’d rather have this one instead, maybe I can fix it.” (CM)From the quotation, we can see Jem was excited about getting the presents, but he will not get any presents from now on. (SD)Furthermore, it is possible that Jem was crying because he found out who put the presents in the knothole, and why Mr. Nathan put the cement in the knothole. (CM)It can be happened that Mr. Nathan put the cement in the knothole to stop someone giving Jem and Scout precious presents. (CM)If the “someone” is Boo Radley, then Mr. Nathan would definitely stop him. (CM) Mr. Nathan would stop Boo Radley trying to communicate with Jem and Scout. (CS)Consequently, there are two possible reasons why Jem had been crying.

           (TS)People have different memories, feelings, and opinions about crying. (SD)In my opinion, people are ok to cry, but it is unacceptable to cry always. (CM)Usually, crying makes me to feel relieved, and calms me down, after I cry very sorrowfully. (CM)For instance, people may cry if one of their family members had a car accident and if it is a very serious situation. (CM)I would cry too if my one of family members get hit by a car. (SD)Nowadays, I do not cry very well, but the recently crying was when I was at Rectory School. (CM)I had been in a very malicious situation at the school. (CM)I cried all night while I was thinking about my parents and my friends. (CM)I believe it was ok to cry because it was very bad that I cannot even speak out about the situation specifically. (CS)To conclude, people have different opinions and different memories about crying, but I believe humans are fair to cry, but not always.

           Overall, Jem cried because he cannot get presents anymore, or he knew who put the presents in the knothole. Furthermore, I have very bad memories that I had at Rectory School. People have their individual opinions and memories about tears. I believe Jem would have a very good reason that is fair to cry, but people are unacceptable to cry always.

Outline for Essay 6

Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 21, 2010

Outline for Essay 6

Main Point or Thesis of Essay: Finding A Good Surprise About A Parent

Bell word: Surprise, discover, shock, interesting.

Paragraph 1 -- Opening

Hook: Think parents are boring?

Comment on the hook: Jem’s surprise about Atticus that he was not a boring father (in TKAM.)

Comment on the hook: My father watching a comedy program on TV.

Thesis (with bell word): Able to find many amazing truths about parents

Paragraph 2

TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis): Scout and Jem’s surprise about Atticus’s talent.

2 Echo words to be used: Astonish, amaze.

SD: Tim Johnson

CM: Heck Tate (the cop) asked Atticus to shoot Tim.

CM: One shot one kill.

SD: Jem and Scout’s amazement and foundation about Atticus.

CM: The best shooter in the county.

CM: Jem told Scout to keep Atticus’s talent secret.

CS: Atticus = not a boring father.

Paragraph 3

TS (Main Idea, Topic, or Thesis): My amazement about my father.

2 Echo words to be used: Shock, startle.

SD: Watching a comedy show on TV.

CM: Saw my father watching a comedy show.

CM: Watching a comedy show secretly.

SD: Hilariousness

CM: Said that comedians are insane.

CM: Acted like he only watches news.

CS: A very serious person can like comedy shows.

Paragraph 4

Hook (the same as paragraph 1, or different): Parents are interesting.

Echo word (could be bell word): Surprise.

Comment on the hook: Parents can be the opposite of what you thought.

Comment on the hook: Ex) Jem and Scout’s surprise about Atticus, and my surprise about my father.

Re-statement, in slightly different words, of the thesis: Parents = safes (coffers) because they have many surprising secrets that we do not know.

Complete Essay 5

Mysterious Tears:

Jem's Tears, and Feelings and Memories of Tears

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 18, 2010

           Occasionally, tears are very mysterious that even a detective cannot detect the reason of crying. We sometimes cannot understand why someone is crying. Tears include many reasons and facts that we cannot observe and understand. Two assumptions about the reasons why Jem was crying in To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM), and my feelings and memories of tears are my great examples that show why tears are mysterious.

           Have you been crying for some reason that nobody knows? On page 84 in TKAM, Mr. Nathan put cement in the knothole in the tree and Jem had been crying while he was standing and looking at the tree. It is very mysterious because the author did not state why Jem was crying. In my opinion, Jem had been crying because he would not be able to get presents such as a watch, from the knothole. Moreover, it is possible that Jem was crying because he found out who put the presents in the knothole, and why Mr. Nathan put the cement in the knothole. Consequently, there are two possible reasons that show why Jem had been crying.

           As I do not know why Jem had been crying, tears are very mysterious to understand. Most of people cry because of themselves. However, tears mean differently to me. I do not cry often, but I mostly cry for my friends, family, relatives, and neighbors, who are very close to me. For instance, when I was in a very malicious situation in Rectory School, I cried all night because my parents would be very disappointed at what I had done, and I did not know what I had to do for my friends. After that accident, I promised definitely that I will not cry anymore. People did not know why I cried all night. It would be very mysterious to them to understand the reason. In my opinion, crying makes people stronger. As I stated before, I promised myself strongly after the accident. In addition, it is beneficial to cry for others rather than for yourself. It would make you to think about others first and then you.

           Overall, Jem cried because he could not get presents anymore, or he knew who put the presents in the knothole. Furthermore, people did not know why I was crying when I was at Rectory School. Also, I believe that people should cry for others first because then people would think about others first. Hence, tear is a puzzling question.

-Self Assessment
1. I am very proud of the transitions and a metaphor that I used for this essay
2. I believe I arranged the sentences well.
3. I could not work on details because the memory is my privacy.
4. I would give my self A- for this essay.

15 Minutes Writing

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Essay 5: Two Body Paragraphs

Mysterious Tears:

Reason Why Jem Was Crying, and Feelings and Memories of Tears

Paragraphs by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 14, 2010

           Have you been crying for some reason that nobody knows? Sometimes, it is very complicated to figure out the reason of crying. On page 84 in To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM), Mr. Nathan put cement in the knothole in the tree and Jem had been crying while he was standing and looking at the tree. It is very mysterious because the author did not state why Jem was crying. In my opinion, Jem had been crying because he would not be able to get presents such as a watch, from the knothole. Moreover, it is possible that Jem was crying because he found out who put the presents in the knothole, and why Mr. Nathan put the cement in the knothole. Consequently, there are two possible reasons that show why Jem had been crying.

           As I do not know why Jem had been crying, tears are very mysterious to understand. Most of people cry because of themselves. However, tears mean differently to me. I do not cry often, but I mostly cry for my friends, family, relatives, and neighbors, who are very close to me. For instance, when I was in a very malicious situation in Rectory School, I cried all night because my parents would be very disappointed at what I had done, and I did not know what I had to do for my friends. After that accident, I promised definitely that I will not cry anymore. People did not know why I cried all night. It would be very mysterious to them to understand the reason. In my opinion, crying makes people stronger. As I stated before, I promised myself strongly after the accident. In addition, it is beneficial to cry for others rather than for yourself. It would make you to think about others first and then you.

Essay #5

Mysterious Tears:

Reason Why Jem Was Crying

A Paragraph by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 12, 2010

           Have you cried for some reason that nobody knows? Sometimes, it is very complicated to figure out the reason of crying. On page 84 in To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM), Mr. Nathan put cement in the knothole in the tree and Jem had been crying while he was standing and looking at the tree. It is very mysterious because the author did not state why Jem was crying. In my opinion, Jem had been crying because he would not be able to get presents such as a watch, from the knothole. Moreover, it is possible that Jem was crying because he found out who put the presents in the knothole, and why Mr. Nathan put the cement in the knothole. Consequently, there are two possible reasons that show why Jem had been crying.

Comeplete Essay 4

Privacy:

Opinions Concerning Teenagers and Privacy

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 10, 2010

           Have you ever concealed your privacies or secrets from others? A secret is a significant part that humans want to conceal. Privacies and secrets play important roles in our lives. Vicious problems of the prier and destroying one’s life are examples that show why it is very inappropriate for kids to pry into others’ secrets and lives.

Most of people want their privacies be hidden because the privacies may affect themselves maliciously if it is discovered. Very vicious problems occur when people try to find out one’s privacy. The vicious problems are that people ignore the one’s personality and individuality while they pry the one’s secret. They do not think about how the person would be affected by their actions.  Thus, it is wrong for kids to try to pry into people’s lives and discover their privacies because kids would keep prying into others’ lives and ignoring others’ individualities.

Moreover, prying into others’ privacies may destroy the others’ lives. People have numerous reasons for concealing their privacies. For instance, some people want their secrets to be concealed if the secrets are about their jobs, financials, and properties. The three examples may be destroyed because of someone prying into their secrets. Especially, kids can be problems because they are able to speak to others about the secrets.  In addition, if the three examples are destroyed, the people’s lives would be devastated. Hence, it is strongly inappropriate for kids to pry into others’ privacies.

Overall, kids prying into others’ lives are very inappropriate because they may occur malicious problems such as ignoring one’s individuality. Furthermore, kids may destroy one’s life by leaking out the one’s privacies. Therefore, prying into others' privacies is very improper for kids.

It is wrong for kids to try to find out people's privacies

Privacy:

Opinions Concerning Teenagers and Privacy

A Paragraph by Inpyo Hong

8th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 6, 2010

           A secret is a significant part that humans want to conceal. Most of people want their privacies be hidden because the privacies may affect themselves maliciously if it is discovered. Thus, it is wrong for kids to try to pry into people’s lives and discover their privacies. Very vicious problems occur when people try to find out one’s privacy. The vicious problems are that people ignore the one’s personality and individuality while they pry the one’s secret. They do not think about how the person would be affected by their actions. Moreover, prying into others’ privacies may destroy the others’ lives. People have numerous reasons for concealing their privacies. For instance, some people want their secrets to be concealed if the secrets are about their jobs, financials, and properties. The three examples may be destroyed because of someone prying into their secrets. Especially, kids can be problems because they are able to speak to others about the secrets.  In addition, if the three examples are destroyed, the people’s lives would be devastated. Hence, it is strongly inappropriate for kids to pry others’ privacies.

Descriptions About Inpyo With Using Metaphor

Descriptions About Me With Using Metaphor

A paragraph by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

October 4, 2010

           Inpyo is everyone’s friend. He is an extrovert and also an introvert who is very active and kind to every people. Inpyo is a joy for everyone. He makes people smile and happy. Inpyo is a gate. He allows people to come into his truthful mind. Inpyo is a sack. He makes his people agree with him and follow him. Inpyo is an earthworm. He tries his best to achieve what he wants. Inpyo is a baby. As a baby starts a new life, Inpyo just started his new life at Pine Point School.