Paragraphs of Essay 8

Lonely:

Dill’s Loneliness And My Loneliness

Paragraphs by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

November 29, 2010

(TS) In TKAM, Dill explains to Scout that he feels as if his mother and new stepfather would prefer if he were not a part of their lives. (SD) As Dill stated in the novel, “They just wasn’t [weren’t] interested in me… when they were home, even, they’d get off in a room by themselves.” (CM) Dill was lonesome and aching for his parents’ companionship and attention. (CM) Additionally, he felt forsaken and like an outcast within family. (SD) Furthermore, he feels as though his parents buy him materials to occupy his time so that they do not have to keep him company. (CM) Dill explains the situation to Scout by saying, “They buy me everything I want, but its now-you’ve-got-it-go-play-with-it. You’ve got a roomful of things. I-got-you-that-book-so-go-read-it.” (CM) Dill would rather have his parents’ love and attention over material possessions. (CS) As a result, Dill escapes his loneliness by running away to the Finches where he knows he will never feel forsaken.

           (TS) Recently, feelings of loneliness in my own life have allowed me to relate to Dill’s feelings of being alone. (SD) This October, I had to leave my first school where I had many friends to attend a new school where I was alone. (CM) I felt like a solitary person segregated from the rest of the world. (CM) To make myself feel better, I had to find a way to relieve my feelings of emptiness. (SD) Like Dill, I tried to replace my need for companionship by focusing my time on objects such as a computer and books. (CM) My feelings of loneliness did not go away. (CM) At this point, I forced myself to make friends. (CS) Therefore, feelings of companionship cannot be substituted.

 

Outline for Essay 8

Inpyo Hong

English 8A

November 16, 2010

Outline for Essay 8

Bell Word: Loneliness

Paragraph 1

(Hook) Loneliness = feeling when you are depressed, and have feeling of being alone.

(CM) Dill’s loneliness with his parents.

(CM) My memories of being lonesome.

(Thesis) people fill lonely in many different ways.

Paragraph 2

(TS) Dill felt loneliness.

(Bell words) Forsake, outcast, or lonesome.

(SD) Dill-“They just wasn’t in to me.”

(CM) Did not show interests at Dill.

(CM) Went into their room and spent time.

(SM) “You’ve got toys play with them.”

(CM) Did not spend time with Dill.

(CM) Seems like ignoring their child.

(CS) Dill felt forsaken because of their parents.

Paragraph 3

(TS) My memories of loneliness.

(Bell words) Outcast, lonely, or solitary

(SD) Feel lonely every time.

(CM) International student – homesick.

(CM) Sometimes, truly want to see my parents.

(SD) Feel solitary – my friends ignore me, and except me from the group.

(CM) Rely on friends, and trust them a lot.

(CM) Sometimes, believe it’s because of racism (Asian) – makes me more outcast.

(CS) I fill lonely because of my beliefs- homesick, wanting to see parents, racism.

Paragraph 4

(Bell Word) Lonesome

(Hook) People become lonesome in numerous ways.

(CM) Dill became outcast because of their parents.

(CM) I become lonely when I think about my house, parents, and friends excepting me.

(CS) Loneliness may not be happened to you if you think about yourself and others differently because loneliness occurs when you think others and yourself is same.

Final Draft of Essay 7

Mature:

Growing Up

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

November 5, 2010

          

To quote Albert Einstein, “True genius is the ability to return to childhood at will.” The quotation signifies that it is beneficial to hold on to the ability to make friends, to learn new skills, and to trust the people that we knew in childhood. Jem’s growing up and my opinion about growing up are examples that show why this period is significant in our lives.

           Humans mature after some events and lessons. In To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM), Jem grew up after Mrs. Dubose’s death, when he became twelve years old. Jem started to think about life and view it differently. Jem told Scout about his extended thoughts when they saw “The cartoon in The Montgomery Advertiser above the caption, Maycomb’s Finch,” they were dumbfounded because it showed Atticus barefooted and in short pants, chained to a desk. It showed that Atticus was assiduously writing on a slate. Jem explained the cartoon to Scout that it was a compliment, and it was about reorganizing the tax systems. Scout could not think about that because she was not mature enough. Even though Jem explained the cartoon to Scout, he refused to answer her question: “How do you know?” It was disrespectful to refuse and say, “Oh, go on and leave me alone,” because he had never done it before. He always answered Scout’s questions. Therefore, Jem became idle and also irritable over time. Consequently, we may discover some benefits of extended thinking and disadvantages of becoming inert, from Jem’s growing up.

           As Jem matures in the story, we may relate to some of his experiences. To quote Mr. Salsich, “I am still growing up.” These words imply that he continues to learn and mature. It is not justified that one has to be very dignified and genteel because one is old. It is wrong to assume that mature people are old-fashioned. As Einstein said, we can act like younger people. This means that we can sometimes tap into our childhood abilities to use them to our benefit. In my opinion, holding on to our childhood abilities throughout our lives is important. Nevertheless, Jem could not hold on to his childhood characteristics, such as being gentle and kind, in TKAM. Thus, being mature may affect one’s character and attitude, so we have to keep holding on to our willingness to make friends, to learn new skills, and to trust people when we are growing up.

Overall, Jem grew up with some advantages and disadvantages. He was able to think and look deeply, which helped him to understand experiences and events. However, it was difficult for him to hold on to his ability to trust others, which harmed his relationships with people. Therefore, experiences that we have while growing up are an important part of our lives, and we are constantly maturing!

First Draft For Essay 7

Mature:

Growing Up

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

November 4, 2010

           To quote Albert Einstein, “true genius is the ability to return to childhood at will.” The quotation signifies that it is beneficial to hold on the abilities such as making friends, learning skills, and trusting people that we had in our childhoods. Jem’s growing up and my opinion about growing up are examples that show why growing up is very significant in our lives.

           Humans grow up after some events and lessons. In To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM), Jem grew up after Mrs. Dubose’s death, when he became twelve years old. Jem started to think and view deeply. When Jem and Scout saw “the cartoon in The Montgomery Advertiser above the caption, Maycomb’s Finch,” they were dumbfounded because it showed Atticus barefooted and in short pants, chained to a desk. It showed that Atticus was assiduously writing on a slate. Jem explained the cartoon to Scout that it was a compliment, and it was about reorganizing the tax systems. Scout could not think about that because she was not mature enough and did not have an ability to think deeply like Jem. Even though Jem explained about the cartoon to Scout, he refused to answer her question: “how do you know?” It was very impertinent to refuse and say, “oh, go on and leave me alone,” because he had never done it before. He always answered to Scout’s questions. Jem became idle and also petulant after he grew up. Consequently, we may discover some benefits and detriments from Jem’s growing up.

           As Jem had grown up, we have also grown up. To quote Mr. Salsich, “I am still growing up.” These words imply that we all grow up and it does not matter how old we are. It is not justified that one has to be very dignified and genteel because the one is old. It is unjust that mature people have to be old-fashioned. As Einstein said, we can act like younger people. This means that we can sometimes bring up our childhood abilities to use them for our own lives. Moreover, if we want to bring up the abilities, we have to hold on the abilities when we are growing up. I believe this, holding on our childhood abilities when we are growing up, is the most significant thing when we are growing up. Nevertheless, Jem could not hold his childhood abilities, being gentle and kind, in TKAM. Thus, being mature (growing up) may affect one’s character and attitude, so we have to keep holding on our beneficial abilities when we are growing up.

Overall, Jem grew up with some advantages and disadvantages. He was able to think and look deeply, but he could not keep his childhood abilities, which are being benign and benevolent. In my opinion, we have to hold on the childhood “beneficial” abilities when we are growing up. Therefore, growing up is the most important part of our lives, and we are endlessly growing up!

Graphic Organizer for Essay 7

Inpyo Hong

English 8A

November 2, 2010

Graphic Organizer for Essay 7

Main Point: Growing up

(TS) Humans grow up after some events, lessons.

(SD) Jem grew up after Mrs. Dubose’s death.

           (CM) starting to think widely + examples

           (CM) Calpurnia’s words + examples

(SD) Mr. Salsich’s words: “people are growing up always.

           (CM) learning myriad things in our lives

           (CM) Learning = growing up

(SD) Growing up in my own life

           (CM) had many embarrassing situations

           (CM) learned from the situations and grew up.

(CS) After sth happens, we would learn, grow up, and fight against it next time.

Complete Essay 6

Surprise:

Parents’ Secrets

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8th Grade English

Pine Point School

November 01, 2010

(Hook)  Have you ever felt your parents are boring, when they are sitting down and watching the news on the television without doing anything special? (CM) In To Kill A Mockingbird (TKMA), Jem and Scout were shocked when they discovered their father’s, Atticus’s, expertise with a rifle. (CM) Moreover, I was also amazed when I sighted my “serious” father was watching a comedy program on the television. (Thesis) Thus, we may discover various surprises and amazing truths about our parents.

(TS)  In TKAM, Jem and Scout were astonished about Atticus's secret talent, shooting. (SD1) Tim Johnson was wandering down the main street toward Finch's house and “walking dazedly in the inner rim of the curve parallel to the Radley house.” (CM)Calpurnia called Heck Tate, a cop; she mentioned that Tim (the mad dog) was near where Scout, Jem, and Calpurnia were. (CM)Mr. Tate gave a rifle to Atticus, who said, "I haven't shot a gun in thirty years", and he shot Tim with only one shot in spite of his distance from the dog. (SD2) Jem said, "dead shot…” and he was amazed after Atticus shot Tim because Jem thought Atticus was a boring father. (CM) Miss Maudie confided to Jem and Scout about Atticus's secret, which was that he was the best shooter in the county when he was young. (CM) When Scout wanted to praise Atticus's secret, Jem told her to keep the secret about Atticus's expertise with a rifle. (CS)From this amazing experience with Atticus, Jem and Scout were astonished at Atticus's talent, and also recognized that Atticus was not a tiresome father.

(TS) As Jem and Scout was shocked about Atticus’s secret talent: shooting, I was also astonished when I discovered my father was watching a comedy program on the television and engaging in applause mingled with laughter. (SD1) When I was taking shower in my parents’ bathroom, I heard my father’s big laughter, which was very hard to hear or discover nowadays. (CM) I went out of the bathroom very silently to find out what happened, and I could discover my father was watching a comedy program. (CM) He was watching the comedy show “very secretly.” (SD1) I could not believe what I discovered, and it was very hilarious to me. (CM) What I knew about my father was that he only watches news on the television but nothing else; he was acting that he only watches the news. (CM) Furthermore, my father had mentioned that all the comedians are insane and criticized me when I was watching a comedy show. (CS) Therefore, I could recognize that my father was not a “boring” father, who only watches the news.

           (Hook) Consequently, we cannot conclude that parents such as “television maniacs” are not actually boring. (CM) Parents might be very opposite of what we have thought; they might be very interesting. (CM) As I stated above, Jem and Scout’s surprise about Atticus’s expertise, and my amazement about my father are my great examples that show why parents might be very opposite of what we have thought or seen. (Re-statement) Parents are safes (coffers) because they have many surprising secrets that we do not know.