Essay 12

Metaphor Essay:

An Essay on My Friendship

An Essay by Inpyo Hong

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

April 17, 2011

           Ralph Waldo Emerson said, “A friend is whom I may be sincere.” There are many friends that I care of, but the one who I can trust and lean on is my mom. We were as close as a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo, but as I was sent to the United States, we are disassociated like the disunited magnets that are blocked by a wall. Without this friend, my mom, there are too many difficulties that I must confront.

My camaraderie with my mom is like the relationship between a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo. Firstly, my mom and I were very close that we knew almost everything about each other when I lived in Korea. I talked to her about my secrets, the information that I do not usually bring out in a conversation with my friends or my sisters, because I believed her and followed her more than anybody in the world. Moreover, even though my mom did not talk to me about some of her difficulties, I always got aware of what was happening. In addition, my mom and I were as intimate as a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo. As the mother kangaroo keeps her baby close in her pouch, my mom and I were friendly. Plus, as the mother kangaroo release her baby, my mom released me from her and sent me to the United States of America for a better education. However, after I came to the United States, my companionship with mom became like the detached magnets that are blocked by a thin wall, trying to be united, but unable to be connected. For example, like the magnets are disassociated and cannot be attached, my mom and I are disunited and cannot meet face-to-face. Furthermore, like the magnets attract and feel each other’s power through the thin wall, my mom and I talk through the phone and share information about each other such as my grades. Even though my friendship with my mom is still close like a mother kangaroo and a baby kangaroo, we are too far from each other to be the connected magnets.

To conclude, my mom is the most significant friend that I always trust, follow, and love. Even though we are the two disunited magnets, she is my mother kangaroo, and I am her baby kangaroo. I regret that I was peevish to my mom when I was in Korea. She is my friend whom I may be sincere.

Self-Assessment:

1. I am continuing to work on organization of the words, and writing comprehendible sentences.

2. One strong point I see is that CMs support SDs. They explain why the metaphors are apt.

3. A possible weak point of this essay is the conclusion, I had a hard time writing a conclusion. I am not sure what I have to write for each sentence.

4. I would give myself an A-, I depicted my friendship with my mom clearly