Surprise:
Jem and Scout's Surprise About Atticus's Talent
A Paragraph by Inpyo Hong
8th Grade English
Pine Point School
October 25, 2010
(TS) In To Kill A Mockingbird (TKAM,) Jem and Scout were astonished about Atticus's secret talent, shooting. (SD1) Tim Johnson, "somethin' wrong with an old dog down yonder", was wandering down the main street toward Finch's house. (CM)Calpurnia called Heck Tate, a cop; she mentioned that Tim (the mad dog) was near where Scout, Jem, and Calpurnia were. (CM)Mr. Tate gave a rifle to Atticus, who said, "I haven't shot a gun in thirty years", and he shot Tim with only one shot in spite of his distance from the dog. (SD2) Jem said, "I saw that, One-Shot Finch!", and he was amazed after Atticus shot Tim because Jem thought Atticus was a boring father. (CM) Miss Maudie confided to Jem and Scout about Atticus's secret, which was that he was the best shooter in the county when he was young. (CM) When Scout wanted to praise Atticus's secret, Jem told her to keep the secret about Atticus's expertise with a rifle. (CS)From this amazing experience with Atticus, Jem and Scout were astonished at Atticus's talent, and also recognized that Atticus was not a tiresome father.
Inpyo,
ReplyDeleteI think that this is a very good start to your essay. You obviously thought out your ideas on this topic very well and made many good points. However, one thing that I can see wrong is that it is Miss Maudie that says "I saw that, One-Shot Finch!" Other than that small error, this is a great way to begin an essay, with descriptive facts and participles like "amazing", "boring" and "wandering". You followed Mr. Salsichs directions very well. Good job!